Spooky Story Starters

Milton Ramirez

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He looked into the Cave for a long time, waiting for his eyes to adjust to the darkness, until he could barely make out what appeared to be a women’s face looking back at him. She had a pale skin complexion, with such an innocent face, with deadly eyes.

ZERO: “ why cant I move, I feel stuck, all that works is my mind.”

The man was in an instant trance, hypnotized by her cunning face, and frozen of the fear you created by staring at her eye. As she starts approaching the man, sweat emerges from his pores; the women smiles and you can see blood on her dark razor sharp teeth.

ZERO: “can anyone hear me!?!Help! Help me please!!”

MysteriousWomen: “ no one can hear you down here, zero, ahahahahahahah, your good as dead.”

ZERO: “What do you want from me?”

MW: “No deed goes unpunished, I want your soul!”


Music plays from what sounds like a broken record playing backwards. Screeches of horror are heard afar in the darkness. The man starts shaking for death comes near; he hears a repeating thumping sound, LOUDER AND LOUDER THE SOUND GETS AS SHE EMMERGES. The beat of is heart pounding out of his chest.

ZERO: “stop patronizing me and get it over with what ever you are.”

When suddenly some lights flash from the hole he climbed down. Damien and his team where stalking him because he knew some codes for ancient work they acquired.

All you hear is a loud roar and Damien’s friend holding the rope up top was gone, although he kept trying to communicate with him there was no answer. The man with the knowledge was named zero, with all things coming to an end he figured to surrender himself for evil lurks in the darkness.  Once Damien caught up to zero his men beat him for a split second before they realized that they actually heard a roar seconds ago before their team member disappeared. These guys were really big men that would resemble a woodchuck. Spooked for their survival they all asked question. Zero knew nothing but they were going to die one by one. Zero revealed the story of what he saw before the men came down from the hole. They began to tremble in fear because it was something supernatural they have crossed.

JC: “our doom is yet to come I say, I warned you Carlos he was dead with out us having to kill him,” Jc said.

Then they all remember a possessed cave that they were once read by some mysterious lady who would disappear instantly once they lost focus.

DAMIEN:  “ I’m starting to think it would be a good idea to team up with the crazy kid Zero, he might know of something to do”

SILVERIO: “we definitely can’t turn back now, the rope was cut.”

Every one stood silent for a sad though that lurked in everybody’s mind about their friend who disappeared after a loud roar sounded off. Then Roder has to say it because they might not make it out alive, so now everybody is conscious of what the next few hours will bring.


RODER: “after Patrick was mysteriously missing, coincidence after a loud roar.”


Damien shouts out to Zero.


DAMIEN: Yo Zero! Wait up, lets drop the beaf and talk man.”

ZERO: “how can I trust you when your trying to kill me?”

DAMIEN: “ we are stuck down here, im tripping the heck out, and you know how to get us out!”

JC: “What are we going to freaking do guys?!”

SILVERIO: “Jc is right guy, we can’t just stay here in one place.”

ZERO: “I Guess your right, but to be honest I only hear story about this cave, so I made a choice of not returning.”

DAMIEN: “You mean you planned on dying down here man?”

ZERO: “ yes, that’s correct, there nothing left for me up there I pretty much did everything I possible wanted to do.”

SILVERIO: “What ever man, we want to live so get us out, quite the bull shit.”

ZERO: “ I see if I remember something I seen in some hieroglyphs when I explored some tomb last summer”

The four of them started walking blind to the dark, lucky most men came prepared and had lights and night vision goggles. Now comfort came to their hopeless lives and their fear grew for they are sinners who’s temptations only get worst.  That moment on they started to accept the lord as their savior, but god was not listening. They have done some crazy things in life that would have to deserve death sentence. These men were well guarded, although bullets would only make their survival worst. Below the earth it dense and any source of loud combustions will tremble the land down under.

ZERO: “ Damien make sure you don’t shoot your guns because the ground will fall on us.”

DAMIEN: “then how are we going to protect ourselves?”

ZERO: “use your hands and knifes, that’s our only defense down here.”

The men quickly scattered and seen doors that looked like there doors from home. Silverio started to panic, so he opens the door and temptation drove him in. What Silverio thinks he see’s to be his mother, is actually an illusion of the lady Zero seen in the beginning. And everyone was in shock to see of what appears to be their fantasy girl naked pointing at them. Talking in a sweet seductive voice to the men, trying to lure them in.

MYSTERIOUSLYLADY: “Your next to come inside, and taste heaven for the first time.”

The door violently shuts close, all you see is a door with a window and white curtains. Behind the curtains you can see the shadow of the Mysterious Lady and Silverio with their hand touching everything in their bodys. One second to soon, and all you hear are roars a demon talking to Silverio. Then silverio snapped out of it and seen the most horrifying posseded girl trying to have sex with him. Silverio pushed her off and ran to the door, which was locked.

SILVERIO: “Guys the door is locked get me out of here!!”

ALLMEN: “we cant break the door down its solid shut!”

SILVERIO: “ Just know I hid 3 billion dollars over by the-…..”

Silverio stopped talking because the lady came from behind and penetrated his back sticking her sharp nails and arm up this body. Blood starts gushing out of his mouth as she pulls his spine out of his body. Laughter is being herd from the other side of the door with bloodstains on the window. The men bolted the different direction to a dark hole that seemed to lead to a different path.


RODER: “ you think we lost her?”

DAMIEN: “I don’t hear anything we are safe for now”

RODER: “ hey you good man? Yo Zero I’m talking to you, are you ok.”

ZERO: “Death, death is what is coming for us, if we don’t repent for our sins and find the the gate out of hell.”

DAMIEN: “ Well most the places we have entered we though of it before going in, then the demond presents its self.”

ZERO: “so that means we just have to act on instinct, no more hiding.”


The men had no strategy now; all that was left was just their will to survive. As they approach a tomb full of candles they hear some strange creepy singing and shadows crowing as they were coming to life. Zero ended up taking command and leading the men through the noise without any hesitation. The pace they set themselves was quick for they not know of what comes ahead. Drums sound off getting louder and louder as the men approach. Only a thin ray of light makes their path visible. You hear the orchestra playing to some demonic melodies, and a group around a squared table. They see their friends who have died, and Patrick was lying down. A hooded person in black was over his body with a dagger aimed for his chest. Silverio was in line waiting for his turn to be next. Soon after the disguised person drives the dagger down his chest, then opens it. You can see his intestines still working, and his heart is still pounding. The hooded person reaches for his heart and removes it raising it up speaking in Latin, then removes the hood and devours the bloody heart. The person was the mysterious lady they have once encountered many times ago.




As Zero yelled run, there was no though about it. They bolt down the cave only going deeper into darkness. They start to hear water drops from the floor up making puddles they cant see. Roder starts touching the ceiling and its wet; there is something strange happening.


RODER: “hey guys there’s water over us, I think its some kind of trick.”

Damien: “there must be a water stream up top right?”

ZERO: “ since this is a cave there is a water stream, but where?”

Damien: “ maybe if we keep on going we can try to jump and see where that takes us.”


The men kept on going further and further. The farther they went the more water formed above them. Soon before you they know it, the water starts to shake as if something was up there. They ignore the movement, for it just might be another mind trick. Roder was falling behind because he was second guessing himself, whether he should keep on going or not. Hands start to come out of the ground and pull the men in. one hand got Roder, ripping his flesh from his calf, pulling on the muscle forcing him from going on further. He yells for help and no one would turn back for him. The only person who heard him has the demonic lady. She starts approaching doing a catwalk looking sexy to caress his mind. Roder falls under her illusion and gives in, leading him to his death. Before he was killed he was tortured, by getting his years ripped off one by one. Then blood pours down his earlobes; the mysterious lady licks the blood and enjoys it. She bites his nose off, and Roder is defenseless for he is incapable to more for he is under shock. He cries out for the lord, but the lord turned his back for he sinned one too many times. Roder was alone to die with his regrets. The lady licks his face covered in blood as if it was a chocolate fountain. She had a very long tongue resembling the tongue of a snake.


MYSTERIOUS LADY: “ no how shall you die earthling? Ahahahahaha.”


MYSTERIOUS LADY: “ I think ill start by eating your intestines, then your tongue so I wont hear your voice!”



Those were Roders last words before his tongue was ripped out of his mouth. He was sobbing now, and the lady kept on delivering pain to his body. He felt weak now because he lost too much blood and slowly he was dying. Before he die the lady decapitated his head then pulled his heart out and watched her eat it. The last thing Roder saw was his heart being eaten by a demonic woman.

The men were out of sight, soon enough their head were covered in water. So they start to crawl to have more space in between the water and themselves.


ZERO: “hey Damien, are you a good swimmer?”

DAMIEN: “not a great swimmer but good enough to survive this hell.”

ZERO: “ we are going to have to swim so hold your breath.”

DAMIEN: “ Lets do this!”


There was less ground and more water, so the two men decide to stand up and swim upwards. Not knowing what will come next they swam harder and harder. They didn’t look down only up to find themselves seeing light from what appeared to be a cave. As they swam up, behind them was a gigantic mouth open with razor sharp teeth planning to kill them before reaching the surface. The didn’t know what was happening when suddenly they hear a mad loud roar and look down to see the mysterious lady angry because there was a barrier she could not pass. The two men knew they made it out, but not yet of course. They were at least safe from that thing trying to kill them. Damien was so overfilled with joy and excitement that he flipped off the lady. Zero was laughing inside and shook his head left and right because he though less of Damien for doing that. That only made the think explode with anger cursing in Latin trying to put spells upon them.  Once they reached the top, zero was the first to get out and see what was up there. The two men where up on a rocky surface, and seen riches, a lot of treasure, they though they were dreaming, but no. They felt so happy and relieved that they wanted to crab everything but they didn’t. The treasure was the last thing on their mind, getting out and finding help was their priority.


DAMIEN: “ I see all this gold and I don’t want it, dreaming of one day being rich and I just care to live.”

ZERO: “ I know, I just care to find a way out of this cave.”

DAMIEN: “let’s make a pact to never speak of this place to no soul or what happened to us down there.”

ZERO: “ we have a deal, but first we need to take some gold to have enough money to ceil off the cave we jumped down, so no one would ever go through what we when through.”

DAMIEN: “hey I see light and hear people!”

ZERO: “ ahaha Lets Go Bro!”


Soon before you know it, the last men two men made it out alive. With their strength they were able to go through hell and back by never giving up and looking of better ways to survive.

10 years have passed since they have encounter this evil down under, and every now and then when they needed money they had their place to get it. They learned many things that day, and helping people is one of them. Greed was out of their souls, and they built a church to give thank to the lord who provided their strength even though they could not see him, hear him, but they could feel him within. Zero ended up marring Damien sister Maria, which brought them two even closer. Damien became a Priest spreading his fortune with his people and cleaning up his city. No one ever knew what happened to the millions of dollars Silverio hid away. Zero and Damien both ceiled the gates of hell until one day a mad person who was a tour guide reopened the cave.


EVIL TOUR GUIDE: “ at last I found `the dark one’s gate!”

TRAVELERS: “ what’s taking so long”

EVIL TOUR GUIDE: “ Right This Way.”






Before i started writing i saw potential, so i tried to keep the story line mysterious and creepy or how the title it falls under is spooky. Anyways this type of characters came from watching movies similar to its nature. I give thanks to professor Dan because he would give us 3 letters or  a phrase and we would feed off that and write. I had my topic after realizing what type of twist my story was going to have in the end. After the first line, i was fueled by creativity and kept on write non-stop to avoid confusion and get stuck. the steps of composing the piece are actually inspirations because my phrase was already spooky and it was halloween at the time so i decided to go a little bloody.The first thing i did was free write, imagine the first line and think how i would react in that situation. I did get stuck at one point in this whole processes of creating this story. It always starts when i stop the work for getting tired of looking at the monitor and few days pass, then you have a hard time to think of what to write where you left off. This writing does not have any emotion attached on my behalf, with that being said this writing is not meaningful to me. My writing actually does a patter of my thinking of the topic, for example each person died for giving up mentaly and feeling less and less sure about themselves. I do feel that my grammer and spelling is clear enough for the readers to understand my meaning to this story. The reason to this bold talk is I feel i have corrected any grammer or spelling erros and typos. My though on what would happen if i continued to work on this piece are of more though. What i mean by that is, i would add more creative and better details of description of the gore going on.

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